Drafting and Planning: Editing

This is scene 5. This is the script of Location 5 and the filming.

Location #5 – Lickey Hills

The camera is following Charlie and Caitlyn running through the woods.

Caitlyn: Quick! Come on Charlie! Run!

Logan: You can't run from me!

Charlie: Quick! He's coming!

Charlie trips up over a log. He turns to face Luke and sees him getting closer. Charlie tries to move backwards away from him

Caitlyn: Come on! Get up!

Caitlyn tries to help Charlie up but he keeps falling over.

Charlie: Just go on without me!

Caitlyn: No! I cant leave without you!

Charlie: Just go! He's coming!

Logan: (Loud, Calm voice) I've got you now!

Caitlyn runs off. POV of Logan looking down at Charlie. Quick shot that shows Charlie's watch at 12. Then a shot behind Logan as he raises his knife that he is carrying to him. Screen goes black and a voice over of Charlie screaming.

Title comes up

I then asked people's thoughts on this scene of my film trailer.